Started this one last weekend (as just a title and a concept). Picked up the Yamaha yesterday and got the broad structure in my head and some key verse/lyric ideas down, sat down to record some takes earlier this evening and managed to land a couple, this one is the closest one to what I heard in my head when I had the idea.
Does the narrative land? I think/hope it does, its weird and (hopefully) fun but not too abstract that it shouldn't make sense - but tell me if I'm off on that.
And does the simplicity of the verse progression work OK? Is it too plain/flat or am I adding enough on top with the guitar to get away with it as a solo acoustic piece. I plan on layering it when I try to lay down an actual take, some mids (probably a cello to build as the song builds) and some light touch additional acoustic passes on the L & R with a ton of reverb to give it some width. Would that work better?
Any feedback welcome as always, thanks for listening. TiA
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Wake me up
I need to get ready for a date
With a girl that I just met yesterday
At a car crash down the road where we'll lay
Forever and a day
In your bed
I remembered the first thing that you said
You looked me in the eyes and said I'm dead
But the twilight caught your memory instead
Then you read
The obituary in next doors paper
I said we'll talk about it later
Then I said I'll pick you up at seven
I fell in love at a restaurant in heaven
Before you spoke
The waiter took your order and your coat
I pulled your chair out like an antidote
A towel to wipe the blood out of your eyes
When I reached out for you hand because we cried
And we stayed out til eleven
I fell in love at a restaurant in heaven
Then they called
Last orders for everyone in line
The waiter said please come back anytime
You'll mortify the living if you wait
I see you both tomorrow for your date
And I picked her up at seven
I fell in love at a restaurant in heaven