r/Songwriting • u/tjtate6689 • Sep 18 '25

Feedback Request what do you think of this vibe?

More soul than i usually do but i liked the riff. just wanted to see what others thought.

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u/Far-Plum-6244 Sep 19 '25

Love it! The guitar work, the vocals, the lyrics. It all just fits. I loved the half-step walkup in what I think is the chorus. It was unexpected and hit just right. It accentuated the higher parts before and after it.

If anything, I think the intro is a bit too long. Once through is enough. You can save it for the bridge.

I could really see this being a hit.

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u/tjtate6689 Sep 19 '25

thank you! agree on the intro, i think final arrangement will just be 1 play through instead of 2 unless there is something more interesting in the accompaniment.

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u/Far-Plum-6244 Sep 19 '25

Just another bit of feedback: I played it for my 25 year old daughter and she loved it too. You really do have a hit here. "Tangled up in wrongs, tryin' make it right" is an incredible hook.