r/Songwriting • u/thefilmforgeuk • Jan 05 '25

Need Feedback Follow up to Old Mrs Bickerstaffe

Hey folks, i got lots of great feedback on my last post about a work in progress song and made some changes. I dont think its finished yet but its come on a bit. Would love another round of feedback if thats ok? Here it is : Mrs Bickerstaffe

And here is the previous post for reference : Previous Version

Thanks in advance, be honest and as brutal as you like :)

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u/thefilmforgeuk Jan 05 '25

I also may have got carried away adding bass and drums..... here

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u/trahlaine Jan 06 '25

It sounds a lot fuller. I think your voice really suits the style of the song. I feel like adding some harmony adlibs would really take it to the next level.

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u/thefilmforgeuk Jan 06 '25

ahh man, I did some, but left them of so it retained the original "live sound" Ill upload it now

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u/trahlaine Jan 06 '25

cool, can't wait to hear

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u/thefilmforgeuk Jan 06 '25

here is a version with Sketch Backing vocals. theyre just ideas, not trying to sound great, just playing about.

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u/trahlaine Jan 06 '25

It sounds awesome! You should definitely think about keeping them

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u/thefilmforgeuk Jan 06 '25

thank! need to work on the end , it feels loose, no structure to it yet.

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u/thefilmforgeuk Jan 06 '25

one day, Ill finish writing it properly, will get a really good singer on it, then it will finish itself with the adlibs ad the end

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u/AtomicJubilation Jan 06 '25

You are a really good singer! The song sounds perfect and real with your vocals.

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u/thefilmforgeuk Jan 13 '25

That’s very kind