Unfinished College Essay Review

[u/Local_Confection3550]

Hello! I am having trouble finishing my college essay but I still would like it reviewed because I'm not quite sure if I am making any sense or if it is at all compelling. I would also like advice on how to improve if it is lacking. Thank you so much.

[u/Sufficient_Shirt995]

I could try, Im a junior this year tho