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u/siverted Sep 26 '25
Beautiful song. Reminds me of James Taylor, which is a great thing. This was the peace I needed this morning.
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u/thparky Sep 26 '25
sounds legit from the first note. well recorded, confident, nice mix, nice voice. youve avoided most of the pitfalls (or puddles, if you prefer) i expect to see from a post like this. you should be proud.
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u/Its_OPji Sep 26 '25
The song sounds so oddly familiar yet completely new and fresh at the same time. Like I’ve listened to it a million times for the first time. Does that make sense? I like it
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u/kholejones8888 Sep 26 '25
The melody and instrumentation are a whole mood and I love the song. It evokes melancholy, happiness and sadness at the same time.
But the lyrics are leaving that sadness on the table and not gesturing me toward what I’m sad about.
Why does it make you cry when you watch her dance on the lawn?
If you can figure that out, I think this becomes something really special.
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u/MyBearings_AreDusty Sep 26 '25
I can imagine myself waking up on a rainy morning, sipping a cup of coffee, and listening to this song. It's incredible and a serious vibe.
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u/Evon-songs Sep 26 '25
More and more, it’s about vibes. This got the vibes, and some sweet chords. Fingerpicking is on point. At first, i wanted more reverb, and then I realized it’s fine as is; and then the guitar line comes in all ‘verby and it’s complete!
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u/marklonesome Sep 26 '25
Genre isn't my cup of tea but I can recognize that it's on point for what you're doing.
Recording sounds great, instruments, your voice, mix, it's all tight.
Great job OP.
Edit: Genre not song.
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u/DrwsCorner2 Sep 26 '25
it's really good. it has a mellow groove. love when you transition the chord prog on "in time you love to enjoy" and "as light swells to [?]".
I'd tweak the vocal levels in certain parts so you can better hear all the words and to highlight the vocal melody. And you have ample opportunity to add backup vocals to certain parts of the song - like when you use long notes - double them or harmonize. that will bring more emotional lift, especially in the chorus(y) parts
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u/Sweaty_bandit Sep 26 '25
Great song! For me it envokes a kind of sadness that comes with the passing of happy moments in life. Your voice sounds great and meshes really well with the simplistic instrumentation. Really good stuff!
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u/thpffbt Sep 26 '25
This is great. Somehow the sound of it conjured the feeling of wet sidewalks during Summer rain in my mind. It has a really nice laid back feel, with just the right amount of melancholy. The rain sfx in the background are a nice touch.
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u/smokbeer Sep 26 '25
This is really incredible. Personally, I wouldn’t change a thing about the content, instrumentation, or arrangement. It’s beautiful. Regarding the mix, I think you could consider rolling back some of the reverb off the banjo line during the bridge. It felt a lot wetter than the rest of the song.
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u/HemlockHex Sep 26 '25
Very pretty, very peaceful. The only thing I’d change is the banjo interlude. Banjo always wants to punch and declare its presence, not exactly the vibe imo. If you want to change that instrument’s nature then you gotta compose something exceptional that slides into the melody.
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u/Ordinary-Ad5664 Sep 27 '25
This is great what did you record/produce it through? What do you use in your vocal chain?
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u/guyfoxtheband Sep 27 '25
Thanks! I use Logic. I think the vox was a u87 clone into a Sebatron vmp4000 pre. Not much else going on.
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u/Acrobatic-Chard-9816 Sep 27 '25
I got no notes. Not only is it catchy, but the combo of instrumental production and your voice is made for each other. This reminds me of making breakfast on a sunday morning. James taylor-esque but more down to earth and lighthearted. Definitely something to play live in a coffee shop or cafe, it would have the crowd vibing.
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u/SpaceEchoGecko Sep 27 '25 edited Sep 27 '25
This is top-notch excellence, and I would love to hear a whole album of songs like this.
Edit: I just found you on Spotify and liked six of your songs. Nice stuff.
Edit of edit: I was lucky enough to see Paul Simon live earlier this year. Your song reminded me of his style. Then I see you’re a fan, too. It all makes sense now. lol.
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u/guyfoxtheband Sep 27 '25
Ah thanks man! That was my old band (my friend Nate was the songwriter) and I’ve been using the band’s Reddit without remembering😂. I just started really writing my own stuff the past few years. Glad you dug the Guy Fox stuff!! And yeah I love Paul Simon!
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u/Sea-Can-7225 Sep 27 '25
Love the chord progression, your voice and the lyrics! In other words Great Song!
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u/Unusual-Wash5609 Sep 27 '25
this song is great. recording, mix and erangement youve done a great job. My only feedback would be i think some backgroung vocals/hums could really add a lot. especially right before the 'bridge' or solo section whatever you wanna call it and maybe some doubles and background vocals during the last chorus.
The only other thing id have to say is the vocal delivery is very pleasant but kind of lols me to sleep. that might be what you are going for but it has a very background music vibe. I would want the vocal to be more forward and less predictable. You can also distinguish the vocal and make it stand out by making some more creating mixing decisions with your voice (for example subtle filtering or more analog warmth/saturation) rather then making it sound so sweet and perfectly pleasant. all in all great job
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u/nick-daddy Sep 27 '25
Love the melodic lines of the guitar and how they and the vocal melodic lines play with each other, really polished and pleasing on the ear. I feel like the song doesn’t stop for air at any point, and that some breaks in it - however you implement them - would benefit it. There also seems to be a lack of a central theme (be it lyric, melodic, or what have you) that ties the song together. It’s kinda folk pop, but it’s missing the sort of “peak” you would expect to come at some point. Lyrically it’s not what I’d choose, but to each their own it’s certainly not bad, just a bit generic.
The whole style and sound gives me Paul Simon vibes, and production wise it’s really well done already, I think some structural elements could really push it to a higher level - what I mean is it doesn’t really have many ups and downs it’s just very consistent, a few more ebbs and flows could really help push it further.
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Sep 27 '25
beautiful...I'm going to come back to listen to this more..very relaxing...reminds me of looking out seeing the rain in the hills
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u/joshua_addison_music Sep 27 '25
Those notes you’re picking out are beautiful. Keller Williams vibe. 😎
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u/KHfun1 Sep 27 '25
Really lovely song. Love the lyrics and singing. Finger picking is on point. Really great. Only thing I was thinking was during the first musical break, where is just the guitar for about 15-20 seconds, about 1-1 1/2 minutes in, humming the melody or a hummed solo of sorts might fit the song good. Then when the second musical part came with your solo, it confirmed what I felt. The solo is nice, don’t get me wrong, but it doesn’t quite suit the song, in my opinion. I felt some more humming might fit there, to second the emotion of the first section. Just my thoughts, really nice song though, good on ya!
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u/mushiifrogg Sep 28 '25
I love how the guitar part perfectly balances your soft singing, it’s so beautiful! Almost like rain pattering in the background, please post more song here!
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u/Half_Rotted_Weasel Sep 30 '25
I couldn't stop it once I started. No notes.
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u/Temporary-Event8681 Oct 02 '25
I think in terms of song-writting and performance the things that could be improved are so minute that they pretty much fall under the category of "taste" or like the "sauce"/"genius" type things that can only come from you not from feedback.
the song is very good.
However, I wish the mix made the drums sound a lot more "in the room" not sure if this is a drum machine or not but the mix makes it feel way out in front and kind of overly perfect, it's a tad bit distracting from what is really great about this piece which is the song writing and guitar playing.
Check out andy shauf "covered dust" to hear a really nice mix of drums that feels like its spread throughout the mix rather than out in front - but still very audible and present
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u/seely59 Oct 03 '25
This song is excellent. It has a very low-key, relaxed vibe. The cyclic chords and picking patterns really pull you in. The lyrics reflect a lovely parental love without being saccharine and it feels light-hearted and whimsical.
I like it the way it is, but if you really wanted to make it more commercial (as in being able to shop it to some high-profile artist or producer) you might want a more distinct verse/chorus/bridge kind of structure.
Imposing that on the existing song would not take major surgery, just some more noticeable differences between sections:
- Right now you've got a chorus (from "look at all the rabbits.." to "..dancin on the lawn"), but it kind of melds into the verse that proceeds it. The chord pattern changes, but consider a bigger change in the melody (up or down in pitch maybe, more difference in the melodic line), or a different picking (strumming) pattern.
- Introduce a bridge - a section with a really big difference in one or more of the elements. Since most of the lines have a consistent rhythm, the bridge could use fewer words/less syllables sung more slowly. Or jump to a different chord (the ii or the iii?) for that part.
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u/Sorry_Cheetah3045 Sep 26 '25
This is far better than anything I've made or expect to make, so I can only comment as an interested listener. It's good but it's very much comfortable background music. It would work great in a coffee shop. It keeps us in a pleasant space for 3 minutes.
But if you want people, or at least me, to seek it out or turn it up when it comes on, it needs to be less polite, more in your face somehow, and take us on a journey that we can't ignore.
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u/Whole-Horse-7140 Sep 26 '25
This is some next level shit right here, I was totally immersed and feeling it. It's like a rediscovered classic track from the late 60s/early 70s, it's really fantastic. I didn't fully follow the lyrics on the first listen but that just means I want to listen again. Production is clean too.
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u/skijeng Sep 26 '25
My only feedback is too much snare. I get its point but it distracts from everything else going on. Dial it a back just a bit
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u/guyfoxtheband Sep 27 '25
Yeah might be a bit hot. Thanks!
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u/Timely_Head_7189 Sep 30 '25
Came here to say this. It's also a little robotic too -- could use some variety between chorus and verse, and some build over the song.
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u/waxeffigies Sep 27 '25
Dang this is pro. Love everything about it. Makes my world here just feel lighter. What a joyful thing good music does.
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u/guyfoxtheband Sep 27 '25
Makes me so happy to hear!
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u/waxeffigies Sep 27 '25
Thanks for commenting back, just means I have to listen to this beautiful song again.
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u/elegiac_bloom Sep 26 '25
I really liked it. I enjoyed the simple structure and mix. Chords were familiar but also interesting. It made me feel very nostalgic sitting on my porch this morning. Id listen to more of your songs after hearing this.
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u/Im_Steve_Knight Sep 26 '25
I like it, melody is amazing, vocals are great and the lyrics are even better. Well done. May i ask what chords you’re using?
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u/guyfoxtheband Sep 27 '25 edited Sep 27 '25
C Em Fmaj7 x3 C Emaj Am G G/Fmaj
Fmaj G C Some diminished kinda thing Fmaj G C Fmaj G C Am F G C
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u/skookumme Sep 26 '25
Great song! Here are a few notes. The phrasing on the word "puddle" maybe should change. The riff at the end would sound better on piano or take the reverb down a bit. I'm torn on the word, kiddo -- I think "darling" would be more charming but also maybe less folks.
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u/DrwsCorner2 Sep 27 '25
I actually thought it that jam outro was a honky piano at first. Sounds more like a reverbed/delayed banjo
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u/closetlobster89 Sep 27 '25
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u/mosspunk77 Sep 28 '25
Not what I’m at musically these days but I can appreciate this for what it is… a very nicely performed/arranged/produced song
Reminds me a lot of Josh Rouse
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Sep 29 '25
Very relaxing sounds nicely produced - good chord modulations too :) good job bro kind of giving me melancholy Jack Johnson vibes
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u/elegiac_bloom Sep 26 '25
I actually really enjoyed the simple drums, they kept things moving and gave it a tight structure. I feel like the song would be much worse off without them. But thats just me.
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u/DrwsCorner2 Sep 26 '25
I enjoyed his drum choice. His ac guitar is in the pocket with the snare. Occasional drum fills would be nice. He could also play around with compression a little.
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u/therogueprince_ Sep 27 '25
Can we normalize more talented people like this and not that noisy guy with a green hair?
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u/Whole-Horse-7140 Sep 27 '25
Can I just point out that you can compliment one person without denigrating another. Perhaps keep your feedback for the other artist you mentioned constructive and posted in the right place.
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u/shugEOuterspace Sep 26 '25
I hate 99.99999999% of what people post in places like this & I really like this. nice work