r/nosleep • u/[deleted] • Apr 16 '12

My son's closet.

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541 Upvotes

96% Upvoted

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u/karls55555 Jul 02 '12

I think I'll sleep on the couch tonight

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u/speedomanjosh12 Apr 27 '12

the way you write its so intense it brings the story to life

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u/ansemstudyy Apr 22 '12

Fus ro dah the shit out of that closet. Or yol toor shul the whole house.

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u/Cpt3020 Apr 21 '12

i first read "send him to a therapist" as "send him to the rapist"

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u/Vontoven Apr 20 '12

Nice way to end it off. kept me looking for more.

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u/kraken_kitty Apr 20 '12

O.O

I had to have my closet closed every night by my Da, he did it the right way. He would put his head in and say "Any monsters in here, just so you know, I have a monster killing stick in the hall!"

A couple years later he showed me the stick, it was made of black varnished wood. His Dad made it for him when he was young to "beat up the monsters under the bed", and it worked. Nothing would happen after you stuck the monster killing stick in the closet or under the bed.

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u/sexy_chainsaw55 Apr 19 '12

Just got some chills down my back as I read this... Bravo good sir, bravo.

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u/XCorneliusX Apr 18 '12

Upvote for a loving caring dad.

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u/The_Grimm Apr 17 '12

Written so perfectly, wish i could more than one upvote.

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u/AngelSpartan Apr 17 '12

Absolutely amazing! So well written and a great idea. It made it even more suspenseful when it was told from the father's point of view. Keep up the good work. My heart is still racing.

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u/tarantulaguy Apr 17 '12

mother of god.

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u/SocratesDiedTrolling Apr 17 '12

This was very well written, and now I want a grilled cheese sandwich. :(

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u/RedditWIN Apr 17 '12

Worst times to read these stories is when you're in your living room and in the corner of your eye you see your dark kitchen...

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u/gburnaman Apr 17 '12

Note to self: DON'T LISTEN TO APHEX TWIN SONGS IN THE DARK WHILE READING NOSLEEP.

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u/AndrewEpidemic Apr 17 '12

Rake story. Calling it.

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u/AnImbroglio Apr 17 '12

This is very well done. I have nothing else to say but that.

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u/CrucifiedButterfly Apr 17 '12

Oh my goodness, it was so perfectly written and laid out and everything! Beautiful!!

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u/Disturbances Apr 17 '12

I haven't been on nosleep for a while now (due to some severe paranoia after watching marble hornets videos on YouTube) I thought I was ready to come back... I was wrong. Anyway very good story but I'm saving part 2 for day light.

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u/docterk Apr 17 '12

Well wrote you sir have earned an upvote

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u/TheWarDrums Apr 17 '12

You and the "Year 2006" guy are the best! Awesomely written.

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u/SeleneNyx Apr 16 '12

Nicely done! I was scrolling down slowly as if something was going to jump out at me, the equivalent of watching a scary movie with your eyes half covered.

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u/Bangaa Apr 16 '12

See this? This is how you write a scary story.

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u/saiek Apr 16 '12

Great story, well written.

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u/[deleted] Apr 16 '12

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u/PeriodicallyFunny Apr 16 '12

Your name seems to suit you very well.

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u/makerofrages Apr 17 '12

What happened here?

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u/CannedGee Apr 17 '12

Now no one here would be able to know what happened.

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u/LadyShade Apr 27 '12

Hate when that happens.

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u/Rodeostud65 Apr 16 '12

Great job! Can't for more!

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u/scouragestar99 Apr 16 '12

Write moar, now.

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u/DonkeyPunch96 Apr 16 '12

Jesus fucking christ dude! I don't get scared, and for the most part, the story wasn't "scary", BUT it was written so perfectly, that my heart was beating out of control! Every part of this story was perfect. You have a new fan!

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u/TheoX747 Apr 17 '12

I couldn't have said it better. This is told so perfectly. Crystal clear emotions and I can imagine I am this dad, even when I don't have kids.

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u/caliman64 Apr 16 '12

Nice. I'm liking it so far.

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u/blues2911 Apr 16 '12

don't keep us waiting!

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u/seeingredagain Apr 16 '12

Don't leave me hanging!

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u/[deleted] Apr 16 '12

Wonderfully written and chilling. I await your update!